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Plum starts our story in jail, the story...

This was my NANO book this year. It's rough....

Well people keep saying I should start my...

REVISED--I moved the stanzas around as...

This poem is how we never feel like people...

Poem on moving to the suburbs. Do the stanzas...

I love parts of this. Do you think the middle...

A poem of someone who tries to show their love...

Stanza three--is the last line workable? Is it...

When I can't sleep and I'm going too fast, I...

Is the verb tense right? This is about when...

I'm trying to capture a memory, a feeling....

This poem may offend you. This is a poem about...

I'm interested lately in doing strong brief...

I'm working on this. Suggestions welcome.

This may offend you, but is it to simple?...

The ending is solid?

Is this stiff? Does it work as is? How to...

This is a different poetic style for me. Does...

As usual, suggestions welcome.

My writing is stuttering lately. All...

Work in progress

Odd poem, needs the edges rubbed off....

I finally wrote something NEW! All suggestions...

Enough? Underdeveloped? Interesting?

I'm in a writing slump. This is a piece I'm...

Haiku---is it enough on its own? If not, where...

All feedback welcome. This is a new one that...

This sucks. Help?

Is this too plain? Need stronger descriptions?...

A very rough poem. I'd just love some feedback...

All feedback welcomed. I'm curious to what you...

Wiggy keeps suggesting I do a chaiku for the...

Does it feel finished? Impressions?

I'm having some stanza issues. Something is...

A riff off the Collaborative Poem exercise....

not sure the ending works.

This poem is for 18+ only and has some bad...

Does this work as is? Suggestions welcome. Too...

Does this feel stiff? This poem is about a...

Too simple? Does it work? Does it feel bland?...

Does the ending fall apart?

Experimental, I'm working more on the feeling...

A lighter piece. Does it work? Does it lack...

I'm not sure this works. I think part of the...

This is a very old poem (15+ years) and I'm...

A poem written about several articles I read in...

A new poem I'm playing with. The end works?

Does work? I think it's choppy.

It's meant to be a spoken word poem which is...

I think my last few poems and this one are...

I've been rewriting some old pieces. I found...

Not sure if this works.

Rough draft of a poem. Feedback appreciated. :)

Wrote this one weeks ago but it was never quite...

Wrote this years ago and just recently found...

A very, very rough poem I wrote at lunch today.

I think this one has great potential. I'm...

rough, simplistic--has good bones though.

another darker mood poem. Maybe disturbing....

Anazi, a former cannibal, returns home after...

This story is about a man that is so caught up...

Does this stand on its own? Ending abrupt? A...

This is a true story. I welcome ideas on how...

Is it spicy enough? To dull? What would you...

Looking as always for my ever present typos....

I dreamed I was editing this piece...so I woke...

I've been editing this story but I'm not sure...

No reviews are required. With the weather being...

There's a contest for a "WHy I Write" contest....

A rough draft. Does the ending work? Too abrupt?

For the time travel contest. I know its not...

And essay on bad says.