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This is a book about titles, Shakespeare, the role of masculinity in the post-feminist world and sexual fantasy. It concers e c love, a would-be novelist, who begins a literary apprenticeship of short-stroy writing, comminplace-book-keeping and diary entry as a self-conscious literary apprenticeship intended to exercise and develop his powers as a writer to fit him to tackle the title he has siscovered in Shakespeare which he believes will propel him to literary greatness. He is an unreliable and self-obsessed narrator whose obsessions cause him to write about aspects of the same topic (hard treatment at the hands of women) from a number of different perspective. The novel is comic in tone and intent. It is finished and has attracted some interest. I am particularly interested in feedback from women readers as it was suggested by a publishing company which did consider publishing the work that it might not appeal to female readers. This was slightly contrary to my intention which was to comically reveal aspects of male psychology to a female audience. I'd be interested to know how successfully this intention was transacted. I'd also of course be interested in hearing any feedback relating to the 'readability' of a text which is by design fragmentary and stylistically varied.

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You very kind reviewers helped me improve on this story I'd long buried at the back of my computer. But now a competition has come up and the theme is 'journeys'. This story is the only thing I have that is anywhere near related so I have dusted it down and would love some further feedback. I've written right up to the 2,000 word limit so can't add anything but if there is anything that could be improved by changing it then please let me know! Thanking you in advance, Keen

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I recently wrote this for a competition and would love some general feedback before I send it in. Many thanks in advance, Keen - Spelling, as always, is in UK English

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An old story that, on re-reading, I can see needs lots of improvement. If you have any thoughts on what I can do to make it more edgy I'll welcome your suggestions. Thanks in advance, UK English as always. Cheers, Keen

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Another old story just rediscovered. I wrote it when I was going through a phase of writing stories with a 500 word limit. Does it work or could it do with a rewrite? All feedback welcome. Cheers, Keen

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Just discovered this old story and realise I never fully finished it. Does it work the way I've left it or could it do with more plot, or simply a better conclusion? Any feedback welcome. UK English as always. Cheers, Keen

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This is a quick first draft done on the whim of an idea. I know it needs much work to sharpen it up - any ideas on how to do this would be very welcome. Many thanks in advance... Keen

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Simon could never have guessed that waking up late for college would change his life forever. A globe-trotting adventure combining action, science fiction and just a little humour!

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Let down by his girlfriend, Andy returned to the graveyard and enjoyed the best sex he would ever have in his life! Constructive criticism welcome. Don't pull your punches-give it to me straight. Well, on second thoughts, please be gentle.

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The First Chapter of the Bubble Frogs - a novel for children of all ages involving Killer Toads, Giant Millipedes, Evil Ugglesomes, Corrupt Journalists, Weird Infoons, Incompetent Policemen, a Deranged Teacher and Two Lost Boys!!

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Nestled in the Vermont countryside, the Duncan family is lulled by the comforts of rural anonymity. Jillian Duncan, a widowed mom, is doing her best to raise her teenage sons. Unfortunately, her life drastically changes when her dog comes to their door and drops a finger on the doormat. The finger belongs to a neighbor, assumed a runaway months ago, when the girl disappeared during a blizzard. Before Jillian contacts police she uncovers a makeshift hangout in her basement dubbed by local teenagers as The Cheech Room. It smells of candles and puberty but reeks of a deadly secret that can't be kept. Jillian must decide whether reporting the girl's body, months after the case was closed, will destroy the only people she truly loves. Challenged by how far she'd go to protect her sons, Jillian attempts to put to rest a troubling secret from their distant past, while staying one step ahead of a detective bent on proving her boys involvement in the girl's disappearance. Swiftly, characters' layers peel away like onion skin and only in the end is the stinging core of truth revealed. Will it be too late to prevent another tragedy? Any constructive feedback would be greatly appreciated. Thanks in advance for your support.

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It's Muriel's fortieth birthday. She decides to have an enjoyable day, alone, at the City Zoo. But she comes up against something far more threatening than escaped, wild animals, although she even enounters one of those! I am experimenting with this story as I only wrote it today (I'm exhausted) and wanted to see how something 'off the cuff' is received i.e. how much more work does it need; is it a reasonable premise etc. As usual, all the spelling is UK English. Thanks in advance, Keen

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Magazines often print stories of 1,000 words long so I thought I would have some fun practising this length. I'm really looking for very general feedback. Cheers!

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I've been playing around with 1,000 word stories and trying to get used to working withing the restricted parameters. I'm really looking for very general feedback e.g. is the story an enjoyable read?

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This is just a quick little love poem about the newness (if that's even a word) of a realtionship.

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I've just drafted this short story for a competition about Whitby Abbey in North Yorkshire, England. I would really value some general feedback and please note that the spelling is UK spelling so may seem a little weird in places. Many thanks...

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I'm not sure how such a bizarre story came to me but the idea of a breast with a life of its own struck me as amusing. And how the mammary can act as a sort of go-between, bringing a man and woman together. I hope no one finds this story offensive for this wasn't my intention. Do please let me know if you find it compelling enough and if it flows okay. My spelling is UK spelling so please bear with me! Keen

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i lived in a guest house on the seafront in kent for quite a few years. this story of honey the labrador and tucker the parakeet is mostly true.

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An account of a Christmas made particularly memorable by a pet rat named Hamlet. Perhaps I shouldn't have posted this story again, but what the heck? It's Christmas and this is fun - and the link to it's appearance in It's A Rats World mag doesn't work :( I have left an original word in this one, but changed it to "kiss" in the published version in case children were reading it! (observant readers will know which word it is LOL) If you decide to read it to a minor, you might change it as well :)

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I was asked to provide a short article for the Queensland Austin Car Club magazine about my husband's Folly! Andrew is a aficcionado of English cars. Before this drama, he owned and still has a 1959 Austin Farina A40, a 1953Austin AS3 (a work in non-progress) and a long-wheel-based, Land Rover Series 3 4WD. Thought some of the car-mad enthusiasts on the site might get a laugh out of this. It's already forwarded to the mag and they've accepted it!

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How I might have began my obsessive relationship with words.

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...fun n frivolous ...merely a PICTO of barely there babydoll nightwear (doin a twisty twirly thang) ---oh and thanx be to sonny for the inspiration! ha!

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....having longed for a thong thought it about time to propose a poser ....yep! it's a PICTO of a posing pouch! ouch!!

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My name is Vivaldi. My Mama says Uncle Derek wants a talking rat story. Bet he doesn't think I can come up with one! I promised Mama I'd be good for a few hours if she typed this up for me! (pokes tongue out)

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A editor who has been kind enough to use some of my work, has requested a "funny" country article for the next issue of Honestly Woman magazine. I remembered this dreadful night, funny in hindsight, but ghastly at the time!

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... a PICTO for those who wear and share the delights of minimalist undies... yes, it's a (slightly rude/lightly erotic) thong!

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Slimeball Murphy has been on the back-burner for awhile, but he can't just languish in the files doing nothing - he has to earn his keep! I've tightened this up a bit and don't know if there is anything further I can do to it, so I will hope that the gurus on this site will please advise!

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This is the second part of the memoir I have written for a HUGE competition sponsored by the Brisbane City Council (southeast Queensland, Australia) I had to cut it in half as the site will only let you post 5000 words at a time. The criteria is that it has to be set in Brisbane and it can be fiction or non-fiction, 4000-6,000 words. The top ten stories will be put into an anthology of the city and into circulation in the city libraries.

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This memoir is being written for a HUGE competition sponsored by the Brisbane City Council (southeast Queensland, Australia. It can be fiction or non fiction, 4000-6,000 words long and MUST be set in Brisbane. This part 1 is almost 3000 words long, so I have had to cut it into two to go on the site. I would be most grateful for constructive criticism. I have to get it RIGHT !!!! "Singlet" is another word for "vest" or undergarment.

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Women attain this skill upon reaching the age of thirteen. It is a skill that has to be nurtured in order to achieve its full potential. This is the first in a series of articles which I intend to write with a view to submission to a women's magazine here in Aussie.

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