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I must point out that when I pasted the chapter onto the site all my paragraphs and sentences were messed up. I did have new sentences etc on new lines, I'm a complete newbie, this is my very first novel. I welcome all critique no matter how harsh, I cannot learn without it, so many thanks in advance. My chapter was over 7,500 words so i will publish second part when points are up. As the Xenerion’s rage across many universes devouring thousands of worlds; it seems nothing can stop them, not even the highly advanced Alterion’s. Then a weapon is born on Earth, a backwater planet only good for Time Slave’s. The Alterion’s find her first; Casey Tuppence, a young girl from the highlands of Scotland will become the most desirable weapon in existence. All that Casey wants’ is a normal childhood but her mother’s death drives her to find answers, answers that she may not like. The Avalonian’s are ancient druids who were driven from Earth to the stars and now live a peaceful life hidden from the rest of existence. They are asked by their God’s to keep Casey safe; they send an unusual spy to watch over her. While trying to avoid the Xenerion’s and the Alterion’s, Casey embarks upon a journey to find the answers she so desperately seeks, but first she must find a way to reach the stars.

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The legendary Violet Dagger, a mystical weapon of fearsome strength, has been uncovered. The only source to prevent its power from falling prey to the wielders of dark magic is the Mastery of Myth: a secret organization specializing in matters of the supernatural. Its Supervisor, Derrick Lord is determined to keep the Dagger out of harm's reach. But strange happenings within the organization and the discovery of an amnesic girl, who is unknowingly tied to the Dagger, will only jepordize his chances. If he fails, human civilization could come to an untimely and brutal end. I look forward to all constructive criticism!

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Alderyle is being slowly invaded by an enemy they thought was dead. The evil is spreading even into the sacred, isolated lands of the Whitshire people, the Children of the Ancients, a nearly immortal race of craftsmen, farmers and tradesmen. "Dove" Athelhard is Whitshire's pride and joy, a young silversmith respected and loved by all. Suddenly accused of a crime he didn't commit, he's cast out into a harsh world he'd only heard about in travellers' tales to right a wrong that never existed. Helped by a small band of friends, he endures unimagined hardships and danger and discovers a destiny forged in prophecy.***Feedback: Smooth read? Plot holes? Continuity errors? Strong or weak sections? Typos?

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HIGH MAGA follows the story of Eolyn, a courageous and fiercely independent woman whose struggle to restore magic is set against a complex background of political intrigue, impossible love and pending war.

This is the sequel to the novel EOLYN, which was workshopped on this site and is currently available from Hadley Rille Books . You may also purchase Eolyn on line through Amazon and Barnes and Noble. Whether or not you have read EOLYN, I welcome your reviews, as I am hoping HIGH MAGA will work as a stand-alone novel. All feedback is appreciated. Thank you for taking the time to read and comment.

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With thanks to my dear friend Amy S, I have realized that this story needs to be told before I finish "Airships and Shapeshifters". Maria Leraunt was a ballerina with Ballet de l'Opera de Paris during the German occupation when a mysterious stranger with a conflicting story shows up and quite literally whisks her off her feet. Now, going by the name of Adrianna the newly formed noxfer looses all ties with her former life when she is gifted with immortality. But immortality comes at a cost: a price on her head. The Shadow Cast will do anything to get their hands on fresh meat for the Arena. And all the while, she is haunted by the face that took away her life. Where will Adrianna's lust for vengeance lead?

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Aidan O’Rourke never dreams that talking to old Diggory Danaher will take him on an adventure of a lifetime. After months of stories about a mythical island and his father, Aidan decides to find out for himself if his father is alive and living as a panther on the mythical island. Stowaway wives, a lost father, bewitched human beings, a wicked witch, pirates, and friendly dragons combine to draw Aidan into a web of intrigue of good versus evil as he becomes the champion of a land that only exceptional men can reach. Aidan proves how exceptional he truly is through the power of faith and unconditional love. Set between sixteenth century Ireland and a timeless, mythical island kingdom called Draconis, King Satin’s Realm relates the saga of four generations of the O’Rourke family as they battle evil in a strange world after finding it in turmoil. The O’Rourkes seem to be called to this enchanted world to be its champions. However, not even a place of such mystery can quell the wanderlust born in the O’Rourke family. Feedback on dialogue, character development, readability, description, and appeal to the audience. Yes, the word is SATIN. I can spell; it is not Satan. This story is as much family saga as fantasy, but there is no family saga category

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A spooky little poem for Halloween. The cadence of the lines is not exact, but I like it the way it is. Hope you enjoy.

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In the First Age a gifted race, the Felwarn, were created to guard mankind from the evil god of that world. Over the ages the Felwarn withdrew from humanity and eventually became distant legends from an ancient world.

Now, in the Fifth Age, a new generation of Felwarn are leaving their safe homeland to take the traditional road of initiation. Felwarn law decrees they must keep their identity and powers hidden from humans.
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Please Note: /1. Word Count; It is a concern but I've discovered it's not a matter of trimming words, but of streamlining the story. I will look at the big picture after completion. But you are welcome to flag scenes you think might not be necessary. /2. Big revisions/rewrites take me time, and will likely take place after this draft stage. Minor tweaks/grammar checks occur along the way.
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This story was in the Finals of the Strongest Start Four (2010) Fantasy genre. I also recip on reviews. Thank you!

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I would appreciate any feedback on this draft. Don't be shy, I have a VERY thick skin.

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Coven of witches, each representing the 12 houses of the Zodiac. I'm recently back to the writing world and appreciate all of your feedback! Thank you so much! Blessing! Pisces ~

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This story contains some adult language and descriptions, references to body parts and bodily functions. Not recommended for anyone under 18 years of age.

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On the world of Guya… In an age of darkness… A time when the Inquisition raged and the Church of the All Father sent Inquisitors and Witch Hunters into the lands to burn witches. One such witch was named Sundra. Sentenced to death by fire, she escapes her fate with the aid of a mysterious swordsman named Jorn. Together they must forge a bond as Sundra takes the oath to be the next Oathbearer and wield the powerful Sword of Balance to destroy the church and save the world from an ancient and unholy evil.

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